Sunday, 26 September 2010

Free verse poem 2 Message in a bottle

Yes another adaption of the police's hit album, cheap, cliqué maybe, but inspired by real emotions. For someone who makes me wonder this ever hour of the day, I present my own adaption of this Free verse poem.

The waves are full of them

A glance sets off another.

That one could need a Gem

Or a hundred thousand to

Get to your beach wherever.

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So this is a rough sketch

The meaning is the same,

I’ve lit the match, writ the

Book, but I ask---

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Do you feel the same?

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I don’t know if I reach you

You’re so far gone, yet I

Sealed it very tight

And addressed to you my dear.

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Will you ever reply?

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The mariner has read it,

I dare say a spaceman

Or two-

But yet none of those concern

More to me than you, you, you

I hope you see what I hath writ

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The suspense is too much, reply!

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Lo it washes up on your shore,

Yet no answer to me befalls,

The look of concern wipes

Across your brow, and is replaced

With a smile.

3 comments:

  1. I love this piece. The concepts of distance, and wonder are universal. Yet this has a fresh feel to it. As always realmskipper I am amazed at the depth of soul of someone your age. <3

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  2. I like it :) Very well written. The emotions pouring out are very clear and the concept is great. A message in a bottle, hoping for the right person to read it and when they do, their face lights up. ♥

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  3. I like it it shows some of your emotions that you keep bottled up. I think you should show them more.

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