Yes another adaption of the police's hit album, cheap, cliqué maybe, but inspired by real emotions. For someone who makes me wonder this ever hour of the day, I present my own adaption of this Free verse poem.
The waves are full of them
A glance sets off another.
That one could need a Gem
Or a hundred thousand to
Get to your beach wherever.
So this is a rough sketch
The meaning is the same,
I’ve lit the match, writ the
Book, but I ask---
Do you feel the same?
I don’t know if I reach you
You’re so far gone, yet I
Sealed it very tight
And addressed to you my dear.
Will you ever reply?
The mariner has read it,
I dare say a spaceman
Or two-
But yet none of those concern
More to me than you, you, you
I hope you see what I hath writ
The suspense is too much, reply!
Lo it washes up on your shore,
Yet no answer to me befalls,
The look of concern wipes
Across your brow, and is replaced
With a smile.
I love this piece. The concepts of distance, and wonder are universal. Yet this has a fresh feel to it. As always realmskipper I am amazed at the depth of soul of someone your age. <3
ReplyDeleteI like it :) Very well written. The emotions pouring out are very clear and the concept is great. A message in a bottle, hoping for the right person to read it and when they do, their face lights up. ♥
ReplyDeleteI like it it shows some of your emotions that you keep bottled up. I think you should show them more.
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